I did not know about the gunas. That sent me on a bit of a rabbit hole. Thank you for introducing me to the concept and for your commentary on it. The strongest part of the essay for me was when you tied it into ‘Give It Up’. There’s almost a futility to the sattvic. Some measure of sacrifice is really the only answer at the end. (I do think there is no greater act than cooking for a loved one at the end of the day).
I really appreciated you including the pictures. This concept is underrated for philosophical essays.
One unsolicited but stylistic opinion:
You’ve used very evocative language as befits the topic of what you’re writing, and you deal with some very abstract ideas that are admittedly tricky to write about. I would consider orienting the reader some more by tightening some of the guardrails of the path you are taking him on so your point is driven more emphatically. Or to follow my own advice and put it succinctly, where do you think you can cut?
Glad you were able to take something away from it. I’m curious, what do you mean “there’s almost a futility to the sattvic”?
In terms of the orientation/guardrails, are you suggesting to be more explicit about where I intend to take the reader (i.e., an intro), and giving reminders along the way?
In terms of the cutting, yes, I concur. Prodigality in word is a difficult sin to curb. Can always ‘Give More Up’ on behalf of the reader.
Thank you for sending over your work :)
I did not know about the gunas. That sent me on a bit of a rabbit hole. Thank you for introducing me to the concept and for your commentary on it. The strongest part of the essay for me was when you tied it into ‘Give It Up’. There’s almost a futility to the sattvic. Some measure of sacrifice is really the only answer at the end. (I do think there is no greater act than cooking for a loved one at the end of the day).
I really appreciated you including the pictures. This concept is underrated for philosophical essays.
One unsolicited but stylistic opinion:
You’ve used very evocative language as befits the topic of what you’re writing, and you deal with some very abstract ideas that are admittedly tricky to write about. I would consider orienting the reader some more by tightening some of the guardrails of the path you are taking him on so your point is driven more emphatically. Or to follow my own advice and put it succinctly, where do you think you can cut?
Appreciate the feedback.
Glad you were able to take something away from it. I’m curious, what do you mean “there’s almost a futility to the sattvic”?
In terms of the orientation/guardrails, are you suggesting to be more explicit about where I intend to take the reader (i.e., an intro), and giving reminders along the way?
In terms of the cutting, yes, I concur. Prodigality in word is a difficult sin to curb. Can always ‘Give More Up’ on behalf of the reader.